Pitch & Pitch Feedback

Music Pitch

This is my pitch for the idea I had for my own music video. I think I was quite confident in actually presenting my idea however I did feel nervous throughout. Hopefully it didn’t show but I quite liked my idea and I was quite optimistic that my peers would actually like my idea as well. 

Music Pitch Feedback

This is the video of the feedback I had received on my idea form my peers. Overall I think it was really good feedback from everyone and there was only a couple of weaknesses that were in there. The strengths of my pitch were that everybody really liked the narrative that I had in mind. My teacher and Tianna had said “I think the link with the boy on the bike could be really good and as Tianna says it’s something a bit more different, a bit more positive than a traditional hip hop video.” My teacher really liked the idea I had of this boy that walks in at the end and picks up then puts down the gun and she even gave me suggestions of putting him in the video from the beginning as a cameo. That idea was probably the best idea I had in the whole video as it really emphasised the message of the song.  After I had talked about what my storyline is Halima had said “I think the storyline is quite deep and it suits how harsh the song really is” This backs up the feedback that everyone had said something positive about the narrative of my work. This really helps me because when writing up about it after the narrative was the main key concept that I could write about. Another thing that was said was that the narrative actually had a meaning to it making it more original. I think the main piece of positive feedback I got was from my teacher; she said that if I add a cameo of this boy then it would make the audience want to watch it multiple times and in my view I think that is quite important.

When it came to weakness Kieran had talked about that my narrative was thought out pretty well, however it really depends on how I edit it which means there will be a lot of hard work in post-production. Also my teacher had said that there was no need for me to have 3 characters to match the lyrics and I should just have normal characters that don’t actually need a status and use them and also I would need to recast and if I was going to have someone play a teacher then I should get someone older to actually play the part. Another thing is, judging from the questions, it is evident that I wasn’t that clear with how I explained my idea as in the feedback I had to clear things up to make my peers understand what I was trying to get at.

My partner in this project is Damanjyot and she has a completely different idea to mine. The songs are complete opposites and the idea itself cannot be matched in any sort of way. Due to this we could not mix our ideas and we had to select one idea and stick with it all the way. The idea that we chose was Damanjyot’s and I feel we can work quite well on it. Her idea consists of getting people’s reactions to her character walking down the street. At first I thought this was quite boring but I had thought of new ideas to incorporate into it to make it more interesting and I now think it can work pretty well. Damanjyot herself is going to be the main star in the video and I will be the director and I think it will work because she suits the song and with my knowledge of camera angles and how to use them makes us a good team and the outcome at the end will hopefully be better than what we thought. 

These two videos portray the same sort of idea as the idea my partner and I have for our music video.